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Stars twinkle and night's here,
I'm leaning to the windows,
Pouring my souls to clear conscious;
I'll share my pain, my sorrow and my fears,
I'll romanticize my desire and my frailty.

But never do I venture through,
The provocation of suicidal and depression.

For the thoughts and drive of pain weren't beautiful,
The desires of depression and suicide weren't romantic;
I'll be here for your wounds,
Never would I let you leave,
With that scar in your heart.

(G.L)
-I'm Here
A thought of a moment, a reminder to the scarred and wounded that suicidal weren't beautiful; an invitation that I'll be here for the ones who cried and yearned for help. 
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like the work. It uses nice and balanced expressions and it has a concise flow and procession of thoughts. However one issue that I did have was with the term 'suicidal' when it should be only 'suicide'.

"The desires of depression and suicide weren't romantic;"

Other than that I think this work has a positive message that few think to write on. Over all a good work :)
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Milk-and-Pie Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks a lot for that feedback! I really appreciate that! :tighthug:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome for it :tighthug:
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Sinnerhowl Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
this is profound
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Milk-and-Pie Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :tighthug:
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Sinnerhowl Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
most welcome! 

I find our writing styles to be eerily similar, to be honest. 
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Milk-and-Pie Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yes, I thought about that too. But one thing I find different is the way you use your vocabularies. I like how your poems are very imaginable with the beautiful adjectives and phrases. :la: 
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Sinnerhowl Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
thanks, that means a lot! 

I love language, and try my best to paint vivid imagery. 
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Milk-and-Pie Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! :manhug:
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